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This was a really difficult 100 word challenge. We had to include these five words in our story: Silence Orange Thunder Pyjamas and Swam. It was a really good challenge. I hope you enjoy! Please comment on it!It was swimming sports. The whole school had had all the races as it was now the time for the pyjama relay. My team went shopping and we bought the same PYJAMAS. We looked like ORANGE oompa loompas. .
Bamm! The wood had been clapped. Zoey was flying like a bullet. Everyone stopped. There was SILENCE. There was THUNDER.
Everyone knew what this meant. The ground was filling up with water like a tap to a bucket. We SWAM as fast as we could. Peter Williams was swimming with the sharks. Literally. As soon as the water came in sharks came to.
This is fantastic Bella! Love your short, effective sentences combined with the similes. Well organised into paragraphs. Have you used the URL link to enter the challenge? Great stuff - keep it up. :)
ReplyDeleteNice writing Bella. I thought that Oompa Loompas were orange. I love the smilies and I really look forward to your next 100 word challenge.
ReplyDeleteWhat a vivid, imaginative tale Curly. You combined the random words in to a sensible story. I wonder if they should put sharks in swimming pools for real to make swimmers go faster?
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